Using the posing of the bear and girl in rough-pencil number 9 (the rough Bernie liked best) as a starting point, I did a new, tighter pencil. I replaced the young woman with the owner's daughter and changed the landscape to represent the owner's vineyard. I also added a gramophone to the right side. The new pencil is then emailed to Bernie for review.

Bernie placed the new pencil into his label design (shown at left) and showed the design to his client. Bernie then emailed me back with new recommendations:

Hello Michael, Here I am with feedback, ...at last. My apologies for the delay. We’ve made a composition of your artwork [shown left] into a label setting, and the client likes it very much. We would like for you to proceed, with the following issues in mind: 1. The Victrola is rather “unfortunately” positioned, behind the bear’s rear. As such, would you mind moving it in such a way that it is clumsily held in the bear’s right hand. It should not be upright. Rather on an angle. I think this will add a certain intrigue to the composition. It suggests music, but at the same time, awkwardness. 2. Looking at the contour of the wine label, please feel free to accommodate the illustration for a best fit. That’s it for now. Talk soon, BHB

I was embarrassed that I had failed to notice the "unfortunately" positioned Victrola, but I was glad Bernie noticed it at this early stage while changes are still easy to make.

With Bernie's recommendations in mind, I continued refining the pencil.